2. PROFESSIONAL STYLE
2.1 Reader-Centred Writing
Writing can be conceptualized as writer-centred or reader-centred. Things like diaries, reflections, and journals are primarily writer-centred, in that they are written for the benefit of the writer. Your schoolwork may also be somewhat writer-centred, in that often your goal is to “show what you know” and thereby “get a good grade.” For example, when writing a paragraph response to an exam question, you might try to include everything you can think of about the topic in order to get maximum points, even if some of the idea you include are not totally relevant. The reader obviously already knows all this, so you are not writing to inform them; you are writing to show what you know, and they are reading to assess your knowledge.
Technical communications require that you shift this mindset and write for the benefit of your reader—or design the content and structure of your communication to benefit your “user.” Clearly you also have your own purpose in writing, but you must align this with the reader’s purpose in reading. In this situation, you will not bombard the reader with everything you know about a subject; instead, you will carefully select only the information that you think the reader wants or needs to know. This mindset should be informed by an understanding of your audience. Use these guidelines and ask yourself the following questions:
Who is my target audience? Are they internal or external readers? Upstream, downstream or lateral from me? Do I have multiple potential readers?
What is their perspectives on the topic, on me, and on the document I will write? What are they expecting to do with the document? Is it meant to help them make a decision? Understand a policy or procedure? What is the document meant to accomplish? Why has it been requested? What is my role and relationship to my readers? What does the reader need to know? Already know? What does my reader NOT need to have explained?
What is my goal or purpose in writing to these readers? What am I trying to communicate? What do I want them to do as a result of reading this document? What information do I need to give them, and in what format, to get them to do this? How can I plan the content to meet my readers’ needs?
What is my reader’s goal? Why does this audience want or need to read this document?
Achieving a clear understanding of your audience is crucial to communicating effectively.
EXERCISE 2.2 Audience Analysis
Choose one of the topics below. Then perform an audience analysis, using the questions above to gain an understanding of the needs of different audiences. Write audience profiles for each situation (or create a fictional “persona” that represents the audience in each case) and consider what sort of information they will need and why?
- You have been asked to write a report on Maintaining Internet Privacy for
a) A new internet user who just signed up for internet service
b) A start up e-commerce website developer - Prepare a document on Food-born Diseases for
a) Restaurant workers (servers and kitchen staff)
b) For a health inspector training course - Provide information on a proposed New Bus Shelter Design to
a) Mayor’s office
b) Contractor
c) Newspaper reporter writing an article on the issue
Professional Tone
“Tone” refers to the attitude that a document conveys towards the topic and/or the reader. You have likely read something that sounded angry, or optimistic, or humorous, or cynical, or enthusiastic. These words characterize the tone. Technical communication tends to avoid displaying an obvious emotion, and instead strives for a neutral and objective tone.
Tone is created through word choice (diction), word order (syntax), sentence construction, and perspective. Consider a piece of academic writing that you may have read. It likely created a formal tone through its use of specialized terminology, sophisticated vocabulary, complex sentence structures, and third person voice. This style suits the genre because it is directed at experts and scholars in the field, and seeks to convey complex information densely and objectively, with an emphasis on reason, logic, and evidence.
Now consider a piece of business writing that you may have read. The tone may be sightly less formal but probably not quite colloquial. The language is direct and plain, and the sentences are shorter and more straightforward. It may make use of the second person (“you”) to build connection with the reader, but likely avoids slang. This style suits business writing because it is directed at colleagues, management, or clients who are seeking information clearly and quickly and who may need to take action on it.
Writing Constructively
Striking the appropriate tone involves understanding your purpose, context, and audience. It also involves an understanding that workplaces are often hierarchical, and that cooperation and collaboration are required. Therefore, it is important to consider how you want your reader to feel, and what may make your reader feel that way. Your goal is to write constructively, which means to use positive phrasing to convey your message to your reader. Table 2.1.1 illustrates the differences between destructive/negative and constructive/positive feelings the reader may experience as a result of the tone used in a document.
| Negative | Constructive |
|---|---|
| misunderstood, judged | understood |
| outraged | conciliatory |
| disgusted | pleased |
| guilty | capable |
| belittled | empowered |
| patronized | respected |
| defensive | proud |
| chastised | valued |
| humiliated | honoured |
| excluded | a sense of belonging |
| resentment | contentment |
Considering how your reader may feel after reading your document is an important part of revision. Did your tone come across like you hoped it would? Could it be misconstrued? Often this is where peer reviewing can be helpful. Asking a colleague to review your document before sending it to its intended audience is a common professional practice, as we can sometimes miss things in our own writing.
Sometimes, you will need to communicate information that is unpleasant, such as delivering bad news or rejecting a request. Communicating constructively is even more important in these situations. Regardless of message, how can you ensure you are communicating constructively?
Adopt an adult-to-adult approach: that is to say, avoid talking down to your reader in a patronizing tone, and likewise avoid sounding petulant or unwilling to take responsibility. Aim to communicate respectfully, responsibly, confidently, and cooperatively — as one responsible adult to another.
Be courteous: focus on the reader as much as possible. Use “you” unless it results in blaming (one effective use of passive verbs is to avoid assigning blame; for example, “mistakes were made”). Use typically accepted forms of courtesy and politeness. Use gender-neutral phrasing and plural forms, unless you are referring to a specific person and you know their gender.
Focus on the positive: emphasize what you can do rather than what you can’t. Try to avoid negative wording and phrasing whenever possible (no, not, never, none, cannot, etc.). Focus on what can be done or improved.
Be genuine: apologize if you have made a mistake. Take responsibility, be accountable, and promise to do better. Be authentic in your expression. Avoid sounding like marketing material. Make reasonable claims that can be backed with evidence.
Consider the following perspectives:
| Writer-Centred (I, we) | Reader-Centred (you) |
| If I can answer any questions, I’ll be happy to do so. | If you have any questions, please ask. |
| We shipped the order this morning. | Your order was shipped this morning. |
| I’m happy to report that … | You’ll be glad to know that … |
| Negative Phrasing | Constructive Phrasing |
| We cannot process your claim because the necessary forms have not been completed | Your claim can be processed as soon as we receive the necessary forms |
| We do not take phone calls after 3:00pm on Fridays | You try … |
| We closed your case because we never received the information requested in our letter of April … |
EXERCISE 2.3 Revise an email for appropriate tone and constructive content
A classmate has asked you to review his email before sending. What revisions to content, tone, style and structure would you suggest?
From: Dogboy.zzzzz@me.com
To: Suzan Last
Date: 12 Feb 2026
Subject: Two Problems
Hey Professor
I’ve been trying to deal with this problem on my own, but I just can’t take it anymore!!! As I’m sure you’re aware, my teammate JR has been absent from our class meetings. Not only that, he’s refused to communicate or submit any work on the team project. And our 2nd deliverable is due TOMORROW!! Basically he’s being a COMPLETE JERK and driving the rest of the team TOTALLY BONKERS! There is no way that this slacker is going to ruin my grade! You need to do something about this FAST!!!!
By the way, I’ve also had some problems accessing the course site, and some emailed course announcements seem to going astray. Mei told you you sent an announcement about a quiz for tomorrow, but I didn’t get the message. It would be great if you could check into this for me ASAP. I’m super busy with midterms coming up and don’t have time to wait around at the Help Desk.
thx
J
For further reading, see “Communication in the Workplace: What Can NC State Students Expect?” a study based on the responses of over 1000 professionals from various fields, including engineering, on how important business, technical and scientific communication is to their work.
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